Written in scars
Afflicted wounds of sorrows past
Written in scars
Precious love his sacrifice ours
Grace to me, infinite and vast
My name was in crimson streams cast
Written in scars
(Isaiah 49:16 Behold, I have carved you on the palms of My hands)
A Rondelet for D’Verse - Meeting the Bar: Looking Back, Looking Ahead
A nice devotional piece. The thought that someone cares enough to keep one's sorrows in the palm of the hand can be a comfort in hard times. Great job on the form as well!
ReplyDeletehow much we mean to him that he carved us in his palms...and how high the price was.. beautiful work on the roundelet
ReplyDeleteI like how you used your poem as a contemporary and meaningful echo of Isaiah's quote.
ReplyDeleteI love the refrain, written in scars ~ Beautiful rondelet ~
ReplyDeleteYour poem definitely accentuates the importance of grace in our life, Alan. It is grace that has made us free.
ReplyDeletea beautiful rondelet.
ReplyDeletenice use of form....our name in the blood is def an image that sticks as well man....
ReplyDeleteWritten in scars. What a wonderful refrain. Says it all. Great result.
ReplyDeleteNothing much to add to what the others have said, Alan. I think the refrain of the rondelet works really well for devotional pieces like this; the repetition highlights what is truly important.
ReplyDeleteNice use of repetitions. Like the effect.
ReplyDeleteThe repetition brings emphasis to your refrain. Your form is very fitting for your subject matter. Well done.
ReplyDeleteIt almost reads like a psalm. This is really a beautiful reminder not only of the suffering, but of the "gift." Agree with the others, the format emphasizes this in a way that pulls it all together beautifully.
ReplyDeletebeautiful! a gift in the scars too!
ReplyDeletecrimson streams cast
ReplyDeleteWritten in scars
… wow. A beautiful write about pain and sacrifice!