Poems. Prayers & Promises

Wednesday, 31 July 2013

My Neighbor


I saw my neighbor
Slowly shuffling

Cap on head
Bag in hand

Out the door
Across the street

I sat and waited
and drove off.

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19 comments:

  1. Great capture I could visualize =)

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  2. Alan,

    A shivery kind of observation, but very captavating with the fine detail.

    Eileen

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  3. Such a strong image in these few lines. Quite wonderful Alan.

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  4. 'slowly shuffling' - important point, how many of them when we drive...patience - vital...

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  5. This saddens me really, but probably he was hoping no one would notice.... That makes me wonder really if people would prefer others notice their difficulties or pretend not to see them.

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  6. THe shuffling could be anything from a slow gait to Thorazine! This was right on the money concerning the prompt - had that Williams feel of the everyday made special. I liked this very much. Amy

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  7. ...sad at times how the best help we can lend to someone is just to watch & understand more than to feel pity... loved this Alan... smiles...

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  8. How kind of you to sit and wait to let him go through first ... it shows compassion. This is lovely :)

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  9. You've made coldness sound like beauty.

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  10. so much in so few words. pain and compassion in a fine visual picture. this was very nice!!

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  11. I could see that person. In fact, right now, after a killer week, I likely AM that person! Cackle. Well done, kiddo!

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  12. vivid image... felt like lending a hand...

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  13. Very interesting poem. I do not know the prompt, but I don't need to. Also, loved reading the comments.

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  14. Very interesting poem. I do not know the prompt, but I don't need to. Also, loved reading the comments.

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  15. Wow, says much in few words. Very Williams-esque in the way it makes the reader fill in more details in imagination, while the poem itself says everything essential.

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  16. A simple everyday occurrence depicted so vividly.i saw him too.

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  17. my oh my.....slightly sinister in a way.

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