This saddens me really, but probably he was hoping no one would notice.... That makes me wonder really if people would prefer others notice their difficulties or pretend not to see them.
THe shuffling could be anything from a slow gait to Thorazine! This was right on the money concerning the prompt - had that Williams feel of the everyday made special. I liked this very much. Amy
Wow, says much in few words. Very Williams-esque in the way it makes the reader fill in more details in imagination, while the poem itself says everything essential.
Great capture I could visualize =)
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ReplyDeleteA shivery kind of observation, but very captavating with the fine detail.
Eileen
Such a strong image in these few lines. Quite wonderful Alan.
ReplyDelete'slowly shuffling' - important point, how many of them when we drive...patience - vital...
ReplyDeleteThis saddens me really, but probably he was hoping no one would notice.... That makes me wonder really if people would prefer others notice their difficulties or pretend not to see them.
ReplyDeleteTHe shuffling could be anything from a slow gait to Thorazine! This was right on the money concerning the prompt - had that Williams feel of the everyday made special. I liked this very much. Amy
ReplyDelete...sad at times how the best help we can lend to someone is just to watch & understand more than to feel pity... loved this Alan... smiles...
ReplyDeleteYou've made coldness sound like beauty.
ReplyDeleteso much in so few words. pain and compassion in a fine visual picture. this was very nice!!
ReplyDeleteI could see that person. In fact, right now, after a killer week, I likely AM that person! Cackle. Well done, kiddo!
ReplyDeletevivid image... felt like lending a hand...
ReplyDeleteVery interesting poem. I do not know the prompt, but I don't need to. Also, loved reading the comments.
ReplyDeleteVery interesting poem. I do not know the prompt, but I don't need to. Also, loved reading the comments.
ReplyDeleteA vivid vignette, Alan!
ReplyDeleteVivid and lucid!
ReplyDeleteWow, says much in few words. Very Williams-esque in the way it makes the reader fill in more details in imagination, while the poem itself says everything essential.
ReplyDeleteA simple everyday occurrence depicted so vividly.i saw him too.
ReplyDeletemy oh my.....slightly sinister in a way.
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